User blog:Nightfern/Fashions of Stories

Hey, Nightfern here! Yes, I know I'm known (and hated, xD) for my insane neatness and strictness. I'm sorry for that. Anyway...

I've had some confusion over the "it happened" style of writing, and the "thoughts" style.

Both are good. Don't get my wrong. I, for one, don't really care which you use. But now I'm having deputy runnings and I need the "it happened" style for that.

Though I prefer the first style. But don't take it personally. Seriously.

So, may I explain this, then? It's hard even for me to explain.

"It Happened" Style
This style of writing is like the Erin Hunter books. You know, the story that tells you what's happening right then, not in the past style. You know? Dustpelts, if I may, I'll show you an example. This shows a same sentence in both styles that I used from Dustpelt's story (note: the first sentence I turned into a "it happened" style):

Willowstar sighed and flicked her tail. "No. Sandstrike will mentor Dustpelt. She's a new warrior, fresh and young, ready to test her skills with an apprentice." The pale grey she-cat turned her attention to the the elderly ginger she-cat Sundrop. "Sundrop will be Cinderpelt's mentor." she yowled.

"Thoughts" Style
This style is like a cat's thoughts; a cat's diaries. It's happened in the past, it's the cat retelling it's story.

However, Willowstar refused and appointed Sandstrike, who was a new warrior to be my mentor and an elderly she-cat Sundrop to be Cinderpelt's mentor.

See the difference? I hope I helped you.