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Fading Starlight
I'd like some critique here. I am not sure who sould critique it, so do it if you want to. I'm proud of it. 21:39, December 18, 2011 (UTC)]]

I'll critique, if that's okay. Sounds like an interesting story! 02:47, December 21, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Still going to critique this? 15:47, December 27, 2011 (UTC)

Yeah, sorry. I'm getting it done. 16:44, December 27, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Sure, it's alright, I'm working on the critique for The Ember too. :D 16:45, December 27, 2011 (UTC)

Not rushing it, but still working on this? 09:33, January 5, 2012 (UTC)

I'm really sorry, but I don't have time to critique it. I'm just too busy. I'm really sorry! :( 19:07, January 7, 2012 (UTC) Shadewing

That's fine. Does anyone else want to take over? I will otherwise. 10:43, January 8, 2012 (UTC)

I have.

I'm craving more of this! An 8. It's unusual, lighthearted and a classic type warriors example.

The plot is different and unusual, which can be hard to get right with so many fanfictions and possible cliche's out there. Although it is classicly warriors, there is no cliche about it. Plot gets a 9. It is full, yet simple, and very addictive. It's a classic tale of 'Oh dear, my leader murders cats, and I've fallen in love with a loner, help, what do I do?' type thing. Possibly, to improve, flesh it out a bit.

Characters, Content get 9 and 8 respectively. Characters are good, well developed and well fleshed out. There is a real sense of the main characters. Blizzard and Graceglow, you can get a good sense of what their personalities are, and their emotion is to be expected. The lesser characters have less of this distinct personality, but the sub main (?) characters have quite a sense of this. Maybe flesh out you lesser characters. And for content, although not long chapters, nor particularly a lot of writing, there is a lot going on. Flesh it out some more, but don't take anything away.

Spelling and Grammar are both top notch. 9 each. There are probably some mistakes, but as I quickly reread it, I noticed nothing. Nothing at all, which is excellent.

Imagery is interesting. Although quite a lot of it, I still feel it is an 8. Though you descibe the cats and their surroundings and the emotion and whatnot plenty, I feel it is lack slightly on core description, like paragraphs of 'Gracglow could see that blahblah was blahblahing' and stuff. Although the imagery there is lovely, it is lacking in the simple descriptory stuff.

Overall, an excellent piece, and I'm looking forward to more.

Allegiance of the Ancients
I would like Forest to critique this. I think, also, if you haven't already, you should probably read the rest of the series. It might not make much sense without. 15:49, December 27, 2011 (UTC)

'Aight... give me a couple days to read it, I actually just discovered I have friends. (xD) FP   |̲̅̅●̲̅̅|̲̅̅=̲̅̅|̲̅̅●̲̅̅|  17:23, December 27, 2011 (UTC)

I'm not rushing you, but still working on this? 09:32, January 5, 2012 (UTC)

Forest.... Please? I can't critique my own work? And I want you to do it. Please? 18:22, January 12, 2012 (UTC)

The Battle: Maplewind's Secret
Alright, who wants to critique? 22:18, January 8, 2012 (UTC) Shadewing

I will. 22:20, January 8, 2012 (UTC)