Talk:Birth of the Ice Queen/@comment-3040717-20101102193516

Nightfern, you're right; the story could use more improvements, although the general plot is good. The caption of the image is spelled incorrectly, tenses are a bit mixed up, and more cat descriptions wouldn't hurt. A common mistake, "your" for "you're", should be fixed, comma use could be improved, and "brownish gray" should be hyphenated. Better word choice, like Nightfern used, could help, too. But I love the title and the story line/scenario are great! ;)